I will start by defining helicopter parenting in my first paragraph and then explain how I will develop my essay. First, I plan to provide evidence proving that the shift occurred. I hope to find evidence that specifically addresses, for example, how much time parents spent helping their children in the 1960s compared to now. I have already found some statistics (like the one shown below) that demonstrate how parents have specifically intervened in their children's lives.
Second, I will explain why the shift occurred. Already some plausible explanations are that people have fewer children today, which results in them investing more time into each one. Also, parents seem to feel more connected to their students' success and more worried about their job opportunities post-graduation. Additionally, parents may be feeling peer pressure from parents who are also over-involved in their children's lives. All of these factors and more contribute to this shift.
Third, I will talk about the significance of this shift. Many studies have found that students with helicopter parents are more afraid of failure, have more anxiety, have less self-esteem, and underdeveloped life skills. All of these issues have hindered rather than helped students be successful.
Fourth, I will introduce the counterargument and explain how parental attention can help students succeed in many cases. I think this is important because parents should not neglect their children, but rather, try to strike a balance between helicopter parenting and abandonment.
Then I will conclude reflecting on how we can change our behaviors going forward.
Sources:
http://www.parents.com/parenting/better-parenting/what-is-helicopter-parenting/
http://time.com/3904527/helicopter-parent-study-controlling-students-kids-children/
https://www.psychologytoday.com/blog/freedom-learn/201509/declining-student-resilience-serious-problem-colleges#_=_
https://www.law.uh.edu/ihelg/monograph/11-12.pdf
http://hereandnow.wbur.org/2015/08/18/how-to-raise-an-adult
The vocabulary is very stellar! The thesis is well crafted and does a great job previewing your main points that are bound to come. Great amount of sources! Finally, when you talk about parenting, I feel a key component that you are missing is the environment that the parents and the child are in. I feel like this is a huge factor because it somewhat shapes the parents beliefs and teaching style based on their background on how they grew up!
ReplyDeleteI really like the way how the things are listed. It is well organized with good points. However, I would recommend to add more contents in the counter - argument, using sources as your backup support. When you try to make essay balance, it is good to give decent explanation for the counter.
ReplyDeleteLisa, I'm so glad we were able to talk in office hours the other day. (This is a great topic to select from your options!)
ReplyDeleteYour direction so far looks sensible, and my only suggestion would be to change the word "students" in your thesis. (Parents see their kids as their children, not as their students.) However, if you mean that helicopter parenting is hurting children in their academic lives, then say that more directly in the thesis. Perhaps it's a small distinction, but it'll be more accurate.
Hope this helps! I look forward to learning more of your ideas!